That Van Gogh

So I took another shot at writing the poem about the Van Gogh mentioned earlier.

Guess I've been inspired this week. So far, I've written poems at lunch two out of three days.

This was my third shot at this poem, in a completely different version from the earlier attempts (which each went through a few drafts before being discarded).

I'm not too embarrassed to show it round, so see what you think. The other one (from Monday) will have to wait till I've hacked away at it some more.